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Below are a few sections of dialogue I wrote for an upcoming Bratz console game. (A sequel to Bratz: Rock Angels) The complete document is very lengthy, but these sections show examples of writing dialogue for established characters - including what are essentially "barks" in the character voice.

Task Detail:
The player will be asked
to deliver smoothies around
the city to up to 7 NPCs.


Task explanation#1
EITAN
Hey! I’ve got some smoothies
to deliver if you want to
help me out.

Task explanation#2
EITAN
Great! Each smoothie has
a note saying who gets it.
If the smoothie is still
cold when you deliver it,
you get pretty good tips.

Task starts - List#1
EITAN
Here’s one smoothie to
deliver!

Task starts - List#2
EITAN
See if you can get two
there on time.

Task starts - List#3
EITAN
Now try for three
smoothies!

Task starts - List#4
EITAN
Hey, can you do four?

Task starts - List#5
EITAN
Now I’ve got five people,
all wanting smoothies.

Task starts - List#6
EITAN
Six! Can you take it?

Task starts - List#7
EITAN
Now for the big time
– seven!

[New game dialogue will
be randomly selected
from the following
section every time
the player undertakes
a 7-smoothie delivery,
after having completed
it once]


Task starts
- List#7 completed
EITAN
Great! Thanks for taking
these around for me!

Task starts
- List#7 completed V.2
EITAN
You’re the best smoothie-
delivery-girl ever.

Task starts
- List#7 completed V.3
EITAN
I’ve got a ton of
smoothies to deliver –
well, seven anyway.

[Delivery dialogue will
be randomly selected from
the following section
every time the player
delivers a smoothie to
an NPC]


Delivery dialogue#1
EITAN
Good job! The tip’s
all yours.

Delivery dialogue#2
EITAN
Nice work!

Delivery dialogue#3
EITAN
Ice-cold and perfect.

Delivery dialogue#4
EITAN
You work hard
for your money!

Delivery dialogue#5
EITAN
Those tips can
really add up.

Delivery dialogue#6
EITAN
Wow, that’s great.

Delivery dialogue#7
EITAN
Way to go!

Complete 7-strong
Delivery List
EITAN
I can always use a good
smoothie-delivery person.
Whenever you need a little
money come on back!

[Time Up dialogue will be
randomly selected from the
following section every
time the player fails to
deliver a smoothie within
the time limit]


Time Up dialogue#1
EITAN
Hmm, they’re all melted.
Never mind.

Time Up dialogue#2
EITAN
Time’s up, sorry.

Time Up dialogue#3
EITAN
Too late. We’ll need
new smoothies now.

Time Up dialogue#4
EITAN
Warm smoothies just aren’t
the same. Come on back
and try again.

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MGD: Mini-game Dialogue

MGDP: Pairs


Successful pair matching
– Jade#1
JADE
Woo!

Successful pair matching
– Jade#2
JADE
Hey, yeah!

Successful pair matching
– Jade#3
JADE
I can do this.

Successful pair matching
– Jade#4
JADE
Yay!


Successful pair matching
– Sasha#1
SASHA
Right on.

Successful pair matching
– Sasha#2
SASHA
I knew it!

Successful pair matching
– Sasha#3
SASHA
Phew!

Successful pair matching
– Sasha#4
SASHA
Hey, nice!


Successful pair matching
– Yasmin#1
YASMIN
Yeah, I’m good.

Successful pair matching
– Yasmin#2
YASMIN
Sweet!

Successful pair matching
– Yasmin#3
YASMIN
Alright!

Successful pair matching
– Yasmin#4
YASMIN
Woo!


Unsuccessful pair matching
– Jade#1
JADE
Oh, come on.

Unsuccessful pair matching
– Jade#2
JADE
Hey, wait!

Unsuccessful pair matching
– Jade#3
JADE
No way!

Unsuccessful pair matching
– Jade#4
JADE
Awww.

Unsuccessful pair matching
– Sasha#1
SASHA
Wait…

Unsuccessful pair matching
– Sasha#2
SASHA
But I…

Unsuccessful pair matching
– Sasha#3
SASHA
Argh!

Unsuccessful pair matching
– Sasha#4
SASHA
Hey!

Unsuccessful pair matching
– Yasmin#1
YASMIN
I say…

Unsuccessful pair matching
– Yasmin#2
YASMIN
No!

Unsuccessful pair matching
– Yasmin#3
YASMIN
Come on.

Unsuccessful pair matching
– Yasmin#4
YASMIN
Ouch!


Unsuccessful pair matching
with only four cards
remaining – Jade#1
JADE
Wait a minute!

Unsuccessful pair matching
with only four cards
remaining – Jade#2
JADE
Hey!

Unsuccessful pair matching
with only four cards
remaining – Jade#3
JADE
But I thought…

Unsuccessful pair matching
with only four cards
remaining – Jade#4
JADE
Oh no!

Unsuccessful pair matching
with only four cards
remaining – Sasha#1
SASHA
*Gasp* Can’t be!

Unsuccessful pair matching
with only four cards
remaining – Sasha#2
SASHA
No way!

Unsuccessful pair matching
with only four cards
remaining – Sasha#3
SASHA
Hrm. I can still do this.

Unsuccessful pair matching
with only four cards
remaining – Sasha#4
SASHA
I object!

Unsuccessful pair matching
with only four cards
remaining – Yasmin#1
YASMIN
Oh dear!

Unsuccessful pair matching
with only four cards
remaining – Yasmin#2
YASMIN
(worried) Oooohhh!

Unsuccessful pair matching
with only four cards
remaining – Yasmin#3
YASMIN
Uh oh!

Unsuccessful pair matching
with only four cards
remaining – Yasmin#4
YASMIN
No way!


Jade wins#1
JADE
I rock!

Jade wins#2
JADE
Whoohoo!

Jade wins#3
JADE
Winner!

Jade wins#4
JADE
Oh yeah, I’m good.

Sasha wins#1
SASHA
You know it.

Sasha wins#2
SASHA
Take that!

Sasha wins#3
SASHA
That’s what I’m
talking about.

Sasha wins#4
SASHA
Exceptional!

Yasmin wins#1
YASMIN
Oh yeah. I’m good.

Yasmin wins#2
YASMIN
Wheee!

Yasmin wins#3
YASMIN
*squeals with glee*

Yasmin wins#4
YASMIN
Look at me win again!


Jade wins perfect#1
JADE
Way cool!

Jade wins perfect#2
JADE
Perfect!

Jade wins perfect#3
JADE
I’m the best!

Jade wins perfect#4
JADE
All the way.

Sasha wins perfect#1
SASHA
Exactly!

Sasha wins perfect#2
SASHA
I knew I could do that.

Sasha wins perfect#3
SASHA
Way to go me!

Sasha wins perfect#4
SASHA
(hushed voice) Stylin’


Yasmin wins perfect#1
YASMIN
Wow, I’m good.

Yasmin wins perfect#2
YASMIN
Look at me go!

Yasmin wins perfect#3
YASMIN
Oh, wow!

Yasmin wins perfect#4
YASMIN
Woohoo!